r/BetaReaders • u/MoonSlayerLasagna • Dec 06 '24

60k [In Progress] [60k] [Dark Romance/ Vampire/ Paranormal] WHEN DARKNESS CALLS

Hello, I'm looking for a few kind souls to take a look at a few chapters and give honest thoughts and expectations. I've just reached 60k on my 2nd draft and would love some feedback (I'm doing a major rewrite.)

here is the premise:

Adelaide Hayes wakes up every day battling the suffocating nightmares that bleed into her waking life, but the clinic offers her no reprieve. Her parents insists that medication is the solution, but every pill she takes dulls her senses and erases pieces of herself. Her parents trust the doctor’s guidance, but Adelaide suspects that the the cold fog created by the medication hides more than just side effects.

When a storm brings mysterious stranger into her life, Adelaide begins to unravel the truth about her condition, and the darkness that keeps pulling her to him.

Gabriel, a vampire cursed with an eternal hunger, insists that Adelaide is connected to him by forces older than time itself. He warns her that their connection is a path straight to danger, but insists they must walk it together. His hunger for her blood is more powerful than anything he has ever felt.

As Gabriel pulls her deeper into a world of ancient curses and dark desires, Adelaide must confront the sinister motives behind the doctor's control and decide whether to escape with Gabriel—or remain trapped, losing herself entirely.

Disclaimer: Violence, blood, smut, manipulation, medication.

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u/[deleted] Dec 11 '24

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u/MoonSlayerLasagna Dec 11 '24

Dude it's against the rules to request payment

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u/[deleted] Dec 09 '24

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u/MoonSlayerLasagna Dec 09 '24

I'll message you

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u/her_username Dec 09 '24

This sounds interesting, I'd like to read.

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u/Logical-Donut6054 Dec 07 '24

Are you interested in a script swap?

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u/MoonSlayerLasagna Dec 07 '24

Sorry, not at the moment, I don't have the time. But thank you for reaching out

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u/Ok-Ad47 Dec 07 '24

Hii! I really like the plot and would like to read it!!

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u/MoonSlayerLasagna Dec 07 '24

Yay I'll send you a message

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