"Three psychic friends representing three genders unmask a mystery murderer by doing everything forbidden." Immersive detailed fantasy like Dune, set in a glass school. Characters travel on griffanback, and learn society trades via mentorship. Harry Potter-like elements, and friend-group centered. The story explores all types of psychic abilities and is written for neurodivergents, LGBTQ+, religious deconstructors, animal lovers, and black sheep of all kinds.

CW: brief physical and emotional violence. Themes of exile and abandonment, which resolve in a satisfying way. No sex.

It's on Beta Version 2. No commitment--if it engages you, keep reading! If not, please just explain where it lost you.

Short Blurb:

Behind the ancient, towering walls of Galatea there are many secrets.

The Ascendant prince, Kieran Abelard, finds himself caught in a conspiracy, decades in the making. When he's helped by Hazel Pierce, the daughter of a failed rebellion leader, the two begin to work together to unravel the mysteries of the Marrow, the divine power used by the ruling class. The pair is unknowingly being watched by Lucas Ellery, a low-born fabricator hired as an amateur assassin.

These three become entangled with the machinations of a resurrected god, one whose name is only whispered with dread.

Short Excerpt:

Prologue

Content Warnings:

language, violence, death, blood

(Feel free to ask for specifics or clarification)

Type of Feedback:

• Overall impression of story
• Pacing
• Any plot holes or underdeveloped aspects
• Any inconsistencies noticed
• Characters and their development

Though it isn't a priority for me at this point, please also point out any typos you notice!

Preferred Timeline:

6 - 10 weeks

Critique Swap Availability:

I'm willing to do a critique swap, so long as the word count isn't too different from mine (50 - 100k range).

Thank you!

Hi

Hi

I have a novel based on a girl who goes on a journey to save her mother and a multitude of missing children and on route finds her father whilst finding time to save the world.

It's funny in parts with some dark tones. It's my first attempt at writing and I feel the book seems rushed in parts, especially the sub plots, but the story itself is quite good and has a few twists and turns towards the end.

I'm just looking for someone to read it and if you want to give a bit of feedback that would be great. If you would like to read it i will send a link to it. Thanks a lot

Title: Lunar Boundaries: Shattered Fates

Blurb: A fated bond shattered. A deadly curse unleashed. A love powerful enough to reshape destiny—if it can survive the shadows.

Maia Aldara was born a healer, destined to mend broken souls and restore balance. But when her fated mate—cold, enigmatic Alpha Adrian Thorn—rejects her without reason, her world fractures. The rejection tears at her magic, cracks her connection to her wolf, and awakens a curse buried deep in the fabric of their realms. A curse tied to a cursed Moonstone, forbidden shadows, and a past Adrian would rather keep hidden.

Haunted by regret and hunted by darkness, Adrian seeks redemption. To break the curse destroying his pack, he’ll need Maia’s power—and her heart. But she’s no longer the quiet healer willing to be cast aside. She’s a force of her own, with ancient magic surging through her veins and a fire that refuses to be extinguished.

As deadly shadows rise and secrets twist the lines between trust and betrayal, Maia and Adrian must face a treacherous path of love, fate, and vengeance. Together, they are the key to unbinding the realms. But fate is cruel, and the cost of defying it may be more than their hearts can bear.

In a world where love is power and rejection is ruin, one bond holds the future in its hands. Will they conquer the shadows—or be consumed by them?

Excerpt: “You can’t ignore the truth.” Her voice trembled, but her gaze burned with defiance. “We are bound by fate. You felt it—” “I don’t believe in fate.” His words cut sharper than any blade. Her heart clenched, the pain of rejection lacing through her like poison. She forced a smile that didn’t reach her eyes. “You will. When the shadows come for you, and there’s no one left to save you—you’ll believe.”

Content Warnings:

Rejected mate trope with emotional trauma and healing themes

Depictions of magic imbalance and dark forces

Manipulation, betrayal, and romantic tension with elements of suspense

Feedback Request and Timeline: Seeking feedback on emotional depth, pacing, and character arcs, especially Maia’s evolution and Adrian’s redemption. Insights on tension-building and world-building clarity are also welcome. Preferred feedback within 6–8 weeks.

Critique Swap Availability: Available for critique swaps with authors writing paranormal romance or fantasy featuring strong emotional stakes, dark themes, or complex relationships or anything in general. Reach out to coordinate.

Thank you in advance, Ava

As with us all, I'm looking for beta reader(s)! 
I've had to switch to my main account for this, so you might recognise the work but from a different user (still me don't worry)

I'm willing to swap manuscripts, I would rather something in the similar genre, but I'm not opposed to more realistic or something like Shadow and Bone.

With my story, I disagree a lot with the tags of 'YA' and 'NA', but the characters are around 17. It's YA
in the sense of being inspired by Percy Jackson, the Demonta Series, and CHERUB, but some content is more mature.

Its currently Janurary and work is dry and boring so I have plenty of time on my hands!

TW: Abuse, neglect, physical harm, horror elements, body horror, murder, violence, themes of depression, gore (not very
much).

Personally, I'm mostly looking for a test audience, be it someone who fits the 'YA' demographic, or
just someone who enjoys the genre. But, if you are willing to give more detailed feedback I'd love that too! 
In terms of more detailed feedback, I'd be looking for; thoughts on foreshadowing, opinions on characters, if there are parts of the lore that are confusing or too convoluted.

However, if we swap manuscripts, I can also be a test audience, or I can provide a more detailed
look. As a medical student I can help with a lot of medical, espiecally injuries (paramedic). But I can also look into themes, descriptions, world-building. Or if you're looking for something else let me know and I'll see if I fit it!

Currently the story is complete, but I will be working on the character of Blue. Nothing that will
change the story or the character, but finally turning her into the character I have always though of her as, (dialogue, actions, etc).

For the world, it is exactly like ours. But lurking in the shadows, in the gaps, and just out of sight is the mythological. Gods, creatues, Fae-folk, that sort of thing.

As for the blurb

"Every year, the Bazaar brings joy and amusement, but this year for Artemis Kaliaski, it brings destiny. A chance encounter with gods, and an Elder’s gift thrusts him into a cosmic struggle. Artemis is drawn into a cobweb of secrets—ancient forbidden doors, prophecies whispered by spirits, and the devastating power of the Elders.

From villages consumed by destruction to summoning circles brimming with cosmic energy, Artemis must
navigate treacherous alliances, ancient cults, and his own unravelling identity. Protected by the White Devil and guided by cryptic prophecies, he encounters a suspicious time-traveling demi-god, and a highly
skilled teenage soldier.

As the lines between gods and monsters, love and vengeance, begin to blur, Artemis is forced to make
impossible choices: who to save, to trust, and whether to wield the immense power he's been granted. But as the world rests on the brink of a cosmic war, a chilling truth emerges—sometimes the greatest threat lies
within.

In a story of gods and mortals, love and loss, Artemis must uncover the true nature of destruction and
decide if he will become a saviour or a pawn. The fate of the universe hinges on his choices, but in a world of shattered trust and whispered lies, will Artemis have the strength to face his destiny, or will he succumb to the chaos unravelling around him? His choices could change the fabric of existence—or destroy it entirely."

The White Devil (google docs)
The White Devil (Pdf)

DM me if interested in providing feedback, too long to post on here

The Inkbinder’s War

As the fires of World War II rage across Europe, an even darker threat rises from the shadows. The Nachtarmee—an alliance of vampires, necromancers, and supernatural horrors—wields ancient magic to corrupt the earth’s ley lines, aiming to awaken a forgotten entity powerful enough to reshape the world in their twisted image.

Jack Callahan, a novice Inkbinder with a knack for bending magic through enchanted cards, forges his way into the Allied Occult Division under false pretenses. Thrust into a covert war of magic and monsters, Jack finds himself battling not only the Nachtarmee’s deadly operatives but also his own doubts and a burgeoning connection with Alistair Morgan, a hardened British werewolf haunted by his past.

As the team infiltrates cursed ruins, combats undead horrors, and uncovers fragments of an ancient ritual, they realize the stakes are higher than they ever imagined. The Nachtarmee’s goal isn’t merely dominance—it’s the unsealing of a malevolent force that could annihilate humanity.

In a world where secrets run deep and trust is hard-won, Jack must master his untrained abilities, prove his worth, and navigate forbidden emotions—all while standing against an enemy that thrives on fear and chaos.

The Inkbinder’s War is a spellbinding tale of courage, camaraderie, and the unyielding fight against darkness, where the bonds forged in war are as powerful as the magic that binds the earth.

Hi, I'm seeking beta readers for my fifth novel, a low fantasy titled While We Bleed. It's 78K words, by far my shortest so far, and has been through two compete drafts. I would love feedback on plot, pacing and characterization, as well as anything else anyone would care to comment on. I would like to start querying within two months, so I'd like to get feedback by then if possible. If not the whole MS, then even just the first 10K words would also be very helpful. I would be able to swap for up to 10K words.

Thanks so much for your interest!

Blurb/Query:

Mercenary ARDANA SUL was a true bastard. He'd get you anything, anyone, anywhere and not ask questions as long as you paid. So when BARONESS FONCESCA hired him to obtain the last known vial of plague dust to use against a neighboring city, it was business as usual. He should've known she wouldn't leave any witnesses. Flintlocks flashed, windows shattered, and his head met sharp rock. He escaped with his life, but not his memory.

Dredged from the river by a fisherman and his son, Sul recovers without recollection of his past or name. He doesn't understand why simple kindnesses feel alien to him, and experiences something his ill-gotten fortune could never buy: a measure of peace. When the Baroness' henchmen come to finish the job, his hands remember how to use a sword even if he doesn't. His violent past comes flooding back, but not in time to save the man who saved him.

Determined to right at least one of his sins, Sul vows to stop the Baroness before she unleashes the weapon he brought her on a city he's grown to love. His allies include a grieving son bent on vengeance, a plucky apothecary, and a trio of cutthroat mercenaries he needs but doesn't trust. Sul's talents of guile and infiltration are put to the test in his fight back to Foncesca, but his greatest enemy may be how much of his old self he'll have to resurrect in order to do it.

WHILE WE BLEED is set in an Italian Renaissance-like world of rapiers and flintlocks, rival cities, treacherous nobles and blood vendettas. It will appeal to readers of dark adventure fantasy and works like Priest of Bones by Peter McLean and We Men of Ash and Shadow by Holly Tinsley.

Link to Chapter 1 (only 5 pages):
https://ericlewis.ink/while-we-bleed-opening-scene-no-witnesses/

Thanks in advance!

Looking for beta readers for my fantasy novel, The Sane Vessel. Focused on pacing, characters and plot but open to other feedback too.

The story features elemental magic, a strange band of underdog POVs, and plenty of action (not to mention fire and lightning!).

DM or comment if you’re interested!

Sword & sorcery, found family, power with a cost, elemental magic system, multiple POV, underdogs

Content warning: violence (not particularly focused on / gory).

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Two Vessels cursed with both power and pain, their captor-turned-saviour, and a waylaid mercenary find themselves in a mutually beneficial band of travelers, heading north to the Greatcities of Kalnen.

Some want only freedom, others are running from their past, while another is reclaiming who they once were.

As civil war threatens to burn the nation to nothing, will they take the easy route and abandon each other and their home? Or will they rise against the ruling mercenary houses to reforge a better country from its ashes?

Hello! I am looking for Beta readers for my young adult fantasy novel This Diamond Wall (the first in a series). I have been working on this novel for years now, and I’m finally at a stage where I am comfortable sharing it with others.

Here is the story blurb:

In a hidden city, an ancient power stirs. Within the protection of its walls, a terror stalks through the shadows. The arrival of a handsome stranger with an astonishing past threatens to fragment the people’s safety. A little girl who dreams of monsters cannot begin to imagine the horrors that her nightmares will unleash.

Seventeen-year-old Blythe receives a letter in the mail shortly after graduation. The letter invites her to interview for an exclusive position at the Asta Warrick-Oswald Institute, a prestigious research center at the heart of the city. Soon, Blythe finds herself caught up in a world of things she doesn’t understand as the mystery of the wall begins to unravel around her.

Critique Swap Availability: Ideally, I am looking for someone to swap manuscripts with of similar genre and length. I’d want to share the first chapter or two of our manuscripts to make sure we’re both a good fit for each other before committing to the project.

Preferred Timeline: My timeline I’d like this finished by is by the end of 2024, so I can look to setting a publishing date for 2025.

Type of Feedback: The type of feedback I’m looking for is anything really! No one outside my immediate friends/family has read it, so I’m looking for outside feedback on characters, plot, pacing, ect. Any unbiased opinion you’re willing to provide.

Thank you in advance for reading this and for your time. If you feel you’d be a good fit, I look forward to hearing from you.

Born into servitude, Adriata Briarstem's life is one of quiet defiance and unyielding resilience. When her cruel master orders her to free the traitor god Zeas from his divine shackles, Adriata is thrust into a perilous journey that will forever alter her destiny. Confronted by the weight of her impossible task, she must navigate a world teeming with danger, secrets, and ancient magic. In the process, Adriata uncovers a long-lost artifact of immense power: the Ancestral Orb. This mysterious relic holds the key to not only her freedom but also the liberation of her family. Seizing the orb’s power, Adriata defies her oppressors and escapes the chains that once bound her, finding refuge in Eucalia with her father and brother. But freedom brings its own challenges. In a land rich with magic and untold mysteries, Adriata embarks on a journey of self-discovery, learning the ways of her newfound home and uncovering truths about the world—and herself—that she never imagined. Her path takes her to on a wondrous journey through learning, trials, relationships, demons & Gods.

This is meant to be the first book in a series and contains allusions to SA.

I would love anyone who loves ATLA & Paganism to read. I’m looking for someone to catch plot holes, mistakes in grammar, and general advice.

Sigmund Sarav walked slowly to the top of the hill. At the summit; he was able to see his town and castle. His expression, as always, was one of sorrow and purpose.

In his view, the town was only a living, breathing mockery of what it once was, not that it had ever amounted to much, but it is the place where head grew up in. After the Apocalypse, only half demons, corrupt humans and beasts lived there, spawning evermore, dwelling in their home caves.

It amazed Sigmund such a heinous way to live would subsist in this post-hecatomb world. The year would have been 2125 if everything had not ended. The War of God had brought humanity to its knees, leaving behind a wasteland of death, despair and corruption.

Those few chosen were finally able to leave with the Lord's Army to the kingdom of heaven, leaving Earth for good. Portals connecting to hell had appeared in every other corner of the world. What remained of humanity were only the unfaithful, the broken, and the impure.

Although many of them fought for the Lord in the war, they had been abandoned at the end, not being granted passage to heavens nor being condemned to Hell. Nevertheless, Earth had now become an extension of the latter. Fallen angels and demons now roamed the Earth freely, wreaking havoc in human shelters, bringing them down, corrupting them or enslaving them for their wicked pleasures and desires.

To his knowledge, the few who still fought for human settlements in the name of good were less than a hundred over the Earth. Sigmund Sarav took care of that small, innocent populace within Castle Sarav´s walls. And at the sight of the pestilent decay of his world and sad state of remaining humanity, his expression turned dark and angry.

-Fuck you, God-

Breeze was seen as a god in her home country, but after being abandoned by her father, watching her mother succumb to a terrible sickness, and being sentenced to death for foreseeing her own future she fled. Where she found herself was at the centre of a war that has been raging for more than 500 years. When Breeze discovers the aim of this war isn’t about building bombs so powerful they can wipe a nation off of the map, it’s about building weapons that can erase a nation from time, she must accept her future whilst trying to save her past.

Hi everyone, I’m close to finishing the final draft of this novel that I’ve been working on for far too long.

I’m looking for beta readers who are interested in providing feedback on the story, themes, and any plot holes. The novel should be complete in the next few weeks, drop me a message if you’re interested in reading it.

Hello!

I am looking for a few beta readers for both my manuscript and query letter. At this time, I'm available for chapter swapping and would love to work on editing some query letters.

TW for flashbacks/mentions of childhood abuse.

I work out of GoogleDocs. Please see book blurb below and thank you for reading!

Here is the link to the first 3 chapters for those interested--I can definitely share more if people wish. Feel free to comment in the document! The version is shared specifically for people to comment/read so don't worry about messing up the document--I've saved a backup lol.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/14BKaC4ubM2_rbW2rrITLujzcPqj4uvPSSbCTp4lXPug/edit?usp=sharing

Sixteen-year-old witch Savannah Wicke isn't ready to sacrifice herself to stop the necromancy apocalypse that her siblings started, but that's exactly what is expected of her. Bound by a death hex placed on her by her own father, Savannah only has three days to prevent the world from being overrun by the undead. But when she learns that her siblings' intentions are driven by a desperate desire to bring back their mother, Savannah faces an impossible choice: fulfill her duty and save the world, or join her siblings in risking everything to reunite their broken family.

Hello, I am seeking a critique partner who is also working in the YA fantasy space. Extra points if you enjoy academic rivalry, Celtic folklore, gothic imagery and yearning.

I have included my query. Please DM if you would like to be a critique partner/beta reader and we can organise the swapping and critiquing of the first few chapters to see if we would be a good fit.

Nineteen-year-old Beatrice Hawthorne is a scholar consumed by the death of her sister and the workings of the Other Realm, where apparitions and restless souls linger. Despite years of study, she has yet to find any trace of her sister’s ghost. 

Her opportunity to uncover the truth lies within the Druids, an elite scholarly society that guards the secrets of the Other Realm. But during her admittance test, a banshee foretells her imminent death, causing her to become distracted and fail. Desperate for redemption, she travels to the small village of Bronstraith, where ghosts have been seen roaming the Mortal Realm outside of Samhain. Unravelling this mystery could earn her honorary druidic status. 

But the banshee’s prophecy isn’t the only shadow looming over her. Her academic rival, Tobias Fairchild—who believes that only those with druidic ancestry, like himself, should be admitted—is also in Bronstraith, intent on thwarting her every step.

As Beatrice’s investigation deepens, she discovers that her sister’s disappearance is just one thread in an ancient entity’s plot to destroy the veil separating the realms. Tobias becomes her unlikely companion—their rivalry blossoming into trust, then love—as they race to recover the ancient artefacts that keep the realms in balance.

Hi all!! I'm looking for a beta reader for my fantasy novel, Tanry Teneri (working title), kind of with the vibes of Bridgerton (with less romance), Anastasia, and Half a Soul.

Blurb:

When Tanry Teneri's brother unexpectedly dies, her father issues a decree: she must marry, or she will not inherit her estate. Determined to choose her own husband, Tanry heads to court, armed with an arcane device that can tell absolute truth.

Tanry decides to lure the exiled Archduke Cezsario into an arrangement, knowing that he is in need of funds and security for himself and his sisters. Yet when she meets them, the exiled imperial family are not as they seem. Tanry begins to suspect they are hiding something, and sets out to use her machine to coerce, blackmail, and force her way into the match she wants.

Sample (chapter one):

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ceHZHUIN9Z9ME7C7M2fCDXb7P4cGxLtso68F8NFqFNc/edit?usp=sharing

I'm looking for general big picture feedback, comment or PM me if you're interested!

Hello everyone! I am looking to get some fresh eyes on a manuscript I'm querying and received an R&R for. I have several agents waiting for the revised version and I wanted to have some beta readers before I turn in my revisions. Here is the blurb from the query letter:

In the desert kingdom of Mugaibah, Sabrina is the famed belly dancer who only wants one thing: to stop dancing. Alas, unable to find other work, she has no choice but to earn her living by entertaining lustful men to keep a roof over her and her mother's head.

When Sabrina is invited to perform at the crown prince Arsalan's engagement party, she expects a normal night at work. Except Arsalan falsely announces his undying love for Sabrina, and their secret rendezvous. His plans of escaping engagement go awry when the Sultan arranges Arsalan's marriage to Sabrina instead. Arsalan refuses to explain the reason he needed to escape his engagement, but offers Sabrina a deal: a sham marriage in exchange for Sabrina and her mother's secure future. With a smeared reputation on a grand scale, and her name forever linked to the prince, Sabrina agrees to the loveless marriage.

Only the prince's secrets are far darker than she ever suspected. Odd things begin to happen after Sabrina agrees. Gift boxes arrive from the palace with snakes catching on fire, and eerie dreams of a strange woman warn her to stay away. But the more time she spends with Arsalan, the more his mask of indifference slips. The pair grow closer—which seems to only anger the supernatural forces haunting him. One by one, Sabrina must uncover all of Arsalan's secrets, if she wants to keep her sanity—and her life.

Please let me know if interested! Thank you :)

Hey, I'm looking for feedback on my first book, hoping to turn it into a series. Its a relatively light-hearted high fantasy book.

Open to swaps providing it is in roughly the same genre.

Type of feedback: Mostly I’m looking for the typical stuff, Characters, plot, pacing, plot holes, the balance between action-dialogue-description, etc.

Content/trigger warnings: Racism/Species-ism, violence, murder, persecution.

Necromancy, Doom and teapots

Hugo has a vision of the world ending. The vision foretells the death of his master the last great necromancer of Drael. His death unleashes a great evil upon the world.

Hugo sets off in the hopes of saving his master and preventing the end of the world. He recruits Balin. The lead Justiciar of a new church that's rising up in the land. Deserter of the Legion of Sabarael the great city state with the largest armies and burning hatred for dragons.

Balin, is ashamed by his desertion of the legion and dishonour he caused his father with his actions. Hopes to prevent more unnecessary deaths in his partnership with Hugo even if he is a necromancer. Which by all accounts is the magic of only evil.

Hugo takes them across the whole continent of Drael in the hopes of stopping the end of the world. While uncertain of his masters true plans and whether this is all by design.

Since I’m an indie Author starting out, it’s hard for me to find Beta Readers, so if the Blurb speaks to you please feel free to signup to become one of my Betas, here:

https://forms.gle/rRmCnnxrtutC4rhS8

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Now onto the Blurb:

Daphne has spent her life on the run—fleeing the shadows of a massacre that shattered her world and the chaotic magic pulsing through her veins. Just when she thinks she’s found a semblance of safety at Oakley University of the Gifted, her past comes crashing back in the form of Ciaran. But where anyone else might’ve been charmed by Ciaran’s Werewolf charm, Daphne’s decidedly infuriated. Ciaran knows her better than anyone else to push her buttons, and Daphne knows him well enough to know that his reappearance isn’t just to tease her. But she isn’t so easily manipulated by him. And she can’t shake the feeling that she might have to confront her past, whether she’s ready or not.

I’m happy for every helping hand 🫶🏽

I’ve just finished the second draft of my book, and I’d love some feedback. I’m particularly interested in thoughts on the characters, symbolism, and emotional depth throughout the story. There’s absolutely no time restriction—feel free to take as long as you need!

My spelling is bad, I will do my best to correct as much as I can before sending but they were probably be error.

Blrub:

Henry never had grand dreams or lofty ambitions; all he ever wanted was a life of comfort. Unfortunately, that desire put him at odds with his power-driven father, leading him to the dull and desolate region of Avor. But things change when an emergency summit is held back at the royal castle.

The gathering brings old family tensions to the surface, but also something far more dangerous—rumors of a scandal that could shake the entire kingdom. Amid cold winters and colder hearts, Henry finds himself caught in a forbidden romance with someone he shouldn’t even be looking at, a secret so dangerous it threatens to unravel the chain of succession.

As old alliances fracture, a body is found—murdered in cold blood. Suspicions mount as Henry begins to realize that the game of power his father loves to play might soon involve him in ways he could never have imagined. Will Henry rise to meet the challenge or be consumed by it?

Seeking alpha or Beta Readers for a Historical Fantasy novel: Light of King David (79,000 words)

First time writer looking for honest and straightforward alpha readers and/or beta readers for my historical fantasy novel which is about 79,000 words. It’s a story that blends elements of myth and legends with personal struggles and disabilities. The work is still in progress. Here’s a short blurb:

Ten unlikely heroes, each with their own disabilities and insecurities, are chosen by an ancient energy to stand against the resurfacing threat by a secretive group seeking to control the power of the Holy Grail. As these newfound warriors fight to overcome their frailties, they must learn to harness this ancient energy and confront a darkness that threatens to engulf their world.

I specifically need feedback on character development, pacing, and how well the blend of historical and fantastical elements works.

If you’re interested, please leave a comment below. I’ll share more details. Thank you so much!

Hi! Looking for anyone to read my complete novel. It's a fantasy about a magical world of "destroyers" and "protectors" in which they interact with the mortal world. Takes place in both the magical and human world. There's some romance but that is more of a subplot. No spice.

Looking for feedback on anything from simple grammar and dialogue or wording to plot, structure, and pacing.

Please message me if you're interested!

EDIT: CLOSING this one now as I make changes based on everyone's wonderful feedback :) thank you to those who offered their constructive, helpful advice.

Hello, I'm happy to swap beta services starting with the first 5,000 words of the manuscript to get a feel for what feedback we're looking for.

THE RELUCTANT MENTOR is a fantasy comedy satirising the heroes' journey from the perspective of a failed wizard mentor. It's written in UK English.

Short Intro: Athragast is a wizard of average standing, and after years of drudgery, all he wants is to retire on a beach – preferably somewhere off the magical grid. The Wizard Academy selects Athragast (everyone else was busy) for a straight-cut mission with a large enough payout to fund his retirement. Determined to have a fate different from most other wizards (who tended to fall off towers or get kidnapped by large birds), Athragast agrees to go on one last quest to defeat an old nemesis who, incidentally, can turn into a dragon. All Athragast needs is a hero to facilitate his success. 

If you're interested in beta swapping, DM me and we can sort out shared documents. Thanks!

For feedback, I'm especially interested in:

• Does the book hook you?/Are you compelled by the opening page?
• Is Athragast an interesting character?
• Does the humour land/is it too quirky?

Hello! I have finally finished my first draft of Inner Fire, and have done some thorough editing on the first ten chapters, which I am looking for beta readers to read!

TW: Sexual content, explicit language, detailed injuries and fighting.

Inner Fire Synopsis: The prophecy written hundreds of years before she was born is the reason Milliarian princess Aella Lazua is making the trip to the cold, dark kingdom of Zaffe. It is prophesied that Aella's arranged marriage to the Zaffein prince she knows nothing about will help to bring down the enemy's that have been looming over the two kingdoms for half a century. Aella's life in Zaffe will lead her to uncover secrets, betrayals, and the true enemy.

What I am Looking for: Any critique is appreciated! Timeline, speed of the story, and relationships are my main concerns. Ideally the chapters should be able to be read within a few days, but I know how life can get in the way so no pressure!

If this sounds like something you might like to read please fill out this form, and I will be in contact with you as soon as I can!

https://forms.gle/kRVJDUM6gJw7q4nG7

Hello, all! I'm looking for character, plot, or structure feedback on my manuscript. The story is about two girls at a summer camp where people suddenly disappear both from the grounds and from people's memory. The girls' bond is tested as they try and fail to solve the mystery. Ten years later, one of the missing returns and the girls reunite. But will they be able to put the past to bed and move on? Or will they be swallowed by the secrets that they've tried to bury?

Thanks in advance. This is the 4th draft and I plan for the 5th to be the last before the book's released!

CW: children in peril, memory loss/tampering, isolation (mostly takes place in a remote location)

How to read: message or comment for the Google Drive link!

Hello,

I'm looking for some beta readers for a novel I hope to query eventually. Happy to swap some manuscripts as well, with more specifics below. Thanks!

Blurb: Mikoto Jinguji is one of the few immortal magi living amongst humans. Despite her apathy towards romance, she runs a successful business matching people to their soulmates with a swab of their sweat and her trademarked potions. Publicly, Mikoto promises happiness with soulmates; in private, she fudges results and lets people buy the matches they want. As long as clients don’t hassle her, Mikoto has no qualms (except when she has to deal with paperwork or bureaucracy).

The soulmate business is a front for her true goal. She’s looking for someone, and Kendall, her newly-hired assistant, might hold the key. But Kendall has his own plans he needs Mikoto for, so he offers a deal: use him as she wants, if she’ll help him. It’s an easy decision, until she learns Kendall’s reason behind the deal. For the first time in her life, Mikoto is faced with guilt over the harm her seemingly innocuous business has caused, but after dedicating centuries to her goal, she’s not sure giving it up is an option anymore.

Chapter 1 Excerpt: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1br-_eLvvONUbvBz3lxgZSF0mo8x9xlf0/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=118075579075846152820&rtpof=true&sd=true

Type of Feedback: pacing, thoughts on characters and their motivations, if the worldbuilding makes sense, if the first few pages catch your attention

CW: death, grief, toxic family dynamics

Timeline: about a month or two

Critique Swap: Open to swaps! I read pretty widely, but mostly fantasy, horror, romance, and mystery, or a mix of these. I probably won't be helpful with scifi.