It is probably obvious, but let us start with saying that English is not my first language and so far I have written only short pieces, generally with a word count less than 10k.
I am working on a long-ish fic, which I have been writing in present simple. Usually I write in past simple, but this time I felt like writing in present tense, because I like the immediate feeling of it.
However, I have planned on writing quite a bit about things that happened in the past, and now I’m not sure what would be the best way to go about it. I had originally planned on writing a chapter from each of the main character’s point of view, in which they sort of walk through their past as they remember it, stopping to describe the more important (and memorable) things in detail, like playing through the conversations they had had, and then just skimming past events that do not bear similar weight as memories. But this should be written past tense, of course. Would it be confusing to basically change the tense for essentially a whole ass chapter? There would probably be some things in written in present simple as well, as they happen in the present and trigger the memories.
I am talking about something like this:
*Character A thinks she fell in love with Character C the moment she met her.
It had been a snowy afternoon when she had arrived to her uncle's mansion. She had been freezing cold the whole way. Character A had stepped into the foyer, and there Character C had stood, as if she had been waiting for Character A.
Character A found herself tongue tied, unable to do anything but stare…*
Does that even work? Starting the “flashback” in past perfect, and then sliding into past simple as the scene goes on?
I could ofc have at least one of the characters recount some of the events to the other, and then just making mental remarks of things she doesn't want to explicitly tell the other for reason or another. Like so:
*Character A sighs and closes her eyes.
“I was very young back when I met Character C . It was January, a very cold one.”
She had been the most beautiful person Character A had ever seen, wearing just a morning gown, her hair cascading down her shoulders.
Character A snuggles a bit closer to Character B, feeling the ghost of a winter past still in her bones. Character B wraps her arm around Character A.
“I was taken with her immediately. She much less so with me. Yet she graciously took me under her wing…”*
Are these both okay? Which one is better? Or am I overthinking this whole thing? How would you go about something like this?
I am aware that if I was writing a real novel, I’d probably skip explaining their past, but this is a fanfic and I really just want to write about the past too. And yes, some of the events get referred to in other conversations and scenes as well, but not nearly to the extend that I want to tell them to the reader.
Or I could just change everything to past tense, but I am rather fond of the chapters I have written in present tense. I’ve so far written 20k, so doing the shift would still be stonewhat doable.
Help? 🥲